2009-03-14, #3 Sun Tan, A

(X) It a hot day.

(O) It’s a hot day.

(O) Go to the beach.

(O) Put sun lotion on your face, arms, legs, back and chest.

(X) Put your towel on the sands and laid.

(O) Put your towel on the sand and lie down.

(X) You get sleep.

(O) You go to sleep.

(O) You wake up.

(X) Then yellow arms, yellow legs, yellow back, and yellow face.

(O) Touch your arms, your legs, your back and your face.

(X) The white chest.

(O) They hurt.

(X) Sunbath, Stupid me!

(O) Say, “Stupid me!”

 

Sample Paragraph

 

It was a hot day so I went to the beach. I put sun lotion on my face, arms, legs, back and chest. Then I put my towel on the sand and lay down. Soon I fell asleep. Later when I woke up, I touched my arms, legs, back, and face. Oh, they hurt! I said to myself, “Stupid me!”